tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post5086241157369890677..comments2023-10-02T11:10:32.800-04:00Comments on Through The Never: First Sentence Contribution: Lights OutLucas Pedersonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13072101177732602824noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-10175983063859112452007-05-11T00:15:00.000-04:002007-05-11T00:15:00.000-04:00Lucas: Very powerful. When I began I was not sure...Lucas: Very powerful. When I began I was not sure I wanted to continue, but the words kept me glued to the page. I have to come back and read more later on.<BR/><BR/>Thanks for your words on THE COUCHVinny "Bond" Marinihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07033455144526676371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-22201025388487408992007-05-10T22:19:00.000-04:002007-05-10T22:19:00.000-04:00Thanks Christina! It was a difficult subject.Travi...Thanks Christina! It was a difficult subject.<BR/><BR/>Travis, I'm also glad you came back too! You're right, this is one of the worst crimes anyone can commit, and I'm not even sure the poeple who get off on it much understand it, or care not to, anyway. Thanks for reading!<BR/><BR/>Jon, this was more of a trail. I'm working on a detective story and that too is base around a child murderer. So I wrote up a short story very loosley based on the much longer novella. This story was the result. It happened in my mind's eye and I wrote it down in a flurry. I know, it does need more to it doesn't it. The novella will make up for it, I asure you. <BR/>Thanks for your honest input! I'm always happy to know what I did wrong, rather than what I did good. The good stuff is alright, as long as it's small and to the point. The bad stuff, that's what I need to know, so I can fix whatever it is that needs to be fixed. Resolution, great point, but the novella, which might turn into a novel on me by the time I'm finished, has resolution. Well, at least I'm hoping it will. Thanks for stiopping by! Great to see ya!Lucas Pedersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13072101177732602824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-83087484858683939852007-05-10T12:02:00.000-04:002007-05-10T12:02:00.000-04:00I wrote the previous comment in haste. I shouldn'...I wrote the previous comment in haste. I shouldn't have.Jonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12773667447659795825noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-77659728122514794772007-05-10T12:00:00.000-04:002007-05-10T12:00:00.000-04:00This deserves a much longer treatment. We need to...This deserves a much longer treatment. We need to know more; to feel even more; to resolve things. Resolution.<BR/><BR/>Yes, it was a hard read.<BR/><BR/>My daughter was twenty-four. I sat with her body until the EMS arrived. No resolution.Jonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12773667447659795825noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-67769456586616283562007-05-09T21:07:00.000-04:002007-05-09T21:07:00.000-04:00When I read the first paragraph a day or so ago, I...When I read the first paragraph a day or so ago, I had to leave it. I wasn't sure I'd be able to read the rest.<BR/><BR/>I'm glad I did. This was some intense writing. And it's a good choice not to reveal any reason as to who and why.<BR/><BR/>There's no understanding this kind of heinous crime. <BR/><BR/>Well done.Travis Codyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06192526507760146748noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-8724757484185186752007-05-09T02:11:00.000-04:002007-05-09T02:11:00.000-04:00Wow that first paragraph was really well put. Your...Wow that first paragraph was really well put. Your word choice and the flow of the story kept me interested. I like this, it's very good and I agree with Susan, considering you have two little girls, I could imagine the power that drove you in this.LoveRundlehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01177659277273835858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-88719204176368696662007-05-07T21:13:00.000-04:002007-05-07T21:13:00.000-04:00Fab, I too was surprised when the shooter turned a...Fab, I too was surprised when the shooter turned around and it was the captain. And yes, it was very hard to write. Thanks for reading!<BR/><BR/>Kate, thank you. I couldn't stomach anymore than what I have writen there in details and despcription. I just couldn't do it. But in this case I think less is better anyway. Glad to see you stop by!<BR/><BR/>Charles, emotionally, this was the hardest ever. Writing the thing became a life of it's own though. It just came out and I had the entire story done in five minutes. IT was really wierd, even considering the awful subject matter. It is truly horrible that there are people out there that enjoy hurting children. These people are scum, in my humble opinion. Thanks for reading this one! Means a helluva lot.<BR/><BR/>Perhaps it's time to let folks know why I chose the subject matter I did while writing this story. I chose it, because, it's what I fear the most. One of my children being hurt. I think it is every good parent's fear. I wrote this story based on that fear. And I'm glad the bad guy got what he deserved the end, don't you?Lucas Pedersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13072101177732602824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-65609230669475483672007-05-07T11:20:00.000-04:002007-05-07T11:20:00.000-04:00This was a tough read for me. The writing was gre...This was a tough read for me. The writing was great, some of your best, but the subject matter is certainly a brutal one. Even though I have a son and he's nearly grown, and even though it's fiction, I ache when children are hurt like this.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-59631989430799544182007-05-07T10:01:00.000-04:002007-05-07T10:01:00.000-04:00This was graphic and intense, Lucas. Yet, as awful...This was graphic and intense, Lucas. Yet, as awful as the subject matter was, I think it was some of your best writing. The descriptions were just right - not too much, yet enough that it came alive. Good job.RK Sterlinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01034917381901499281noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-3094151476845417542007-05-07T04:42:00.000-04:002007-05-07T04:42:00.000-04:00That's very powerful. I was as surprised as the ma...That's very powerful. <BR/>I was as surprised as the main character.<BR/><BR/>Not an easy subject. And reading you have 2 kids of your own, that must have been hard.Fabhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11727490011876675399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-56543878620626603982007-05-06T21:11:00.000-04:002007-05-06T21:11:00.000-04:00Thanks Susan! Yes, it was very difficult to go thr...Thanks Susan! Yes, it was very difficult to go through with, although surprisingly easy to write. It just sort of flowed out of me. Kind of strange. <BR/>And I appreciate what you do as well, Susan. Thank you so much.<BR/>Later.Lucas Pedersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13072101177732602824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3397536281585357054.post-7129077897871938672007-05-06T20:26:00.000-04:002007-05-06T20:26:00.000-04:00This is chilling, Lucas. It is definitely one of t...This is chilling, Lucas. It is definitely one of those taboo things that made me leave before I could comment. I had to think about it for a second. Great writing, as usual.<BR/><BR/>This one must have been a bit hard for you..considering you have two little girls. <BR/><BR/>Intense. <BR/><BR/>Once again, I appreciate what you do here.Susan Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05566328070072489203noreply@blogger.com